How To Turn A First Draft Into A Second Draft

Hey guys! Welcome back to Fluff About Fantasy on this fine Saturday. I’ve been up for hours volunteering at the local farmer’s market and finishing up some homework. I’m really looking forward to writing today; I’m on my second round of revisions moving towards a third completed draft.

So today, I want to talk about how to take the first draft of your novel and turn it into a second draft. Since I’ve just recently finished this process, I thought it would be a good idea to show you some of the steps of moving forward with your story. Don’t worry, we’ll get back to more first drafting and researching processes again!

The Second Draft: The Creation Stage

I read in an article somewhere, though I can’t remember which one right now, that the first draft is to get everything down on paper and the second draft is to make the story look like you knew what you were doing all along. I think that this is a very powerful and very useful way to approach drafting, especially in the early stages. Your second draft is a great time to fix all of those places, large and small, where you knew what you wanted to happen, but didn’t know what to say. This is where your story is really going to come to life.

Step Zero: Take Time Away.

Before you can even think about touching your first draft again, you have to put it away. The minimum time recommended is two weeks. Many authors like to have at least a month away from a draft before they come back. Others say it’s fine to come back whenever you start itching to write again. Regardless of your timeframe, time away from your novel will allow you to look at it with fresh eyes and catch mistakes much more comprehensively. Personally, I put mine aside for two weeks and distracted myself with Christmastime and spending time with family.

Step One: The Readthrough

The first step is to confront your first draft with a reader’s eyes. For this step, you’ll need a pen, a highlighter, your draft, and a comfy place to sit. Once you’ve settled in, it’s time to read! Read your entire draft start to finish with as little interruptions as possible. It helps if you’re a fast reader. If you read slowly, try to finish the book in as little time as possible. Don’t leave long gaps in between readings (i.e. a full day or more).

As you read, take notes. This isn’t really a place to fix typos, though if you’re a nitpicky reviser, it’s okay to make note of them. Mainly, you’re going to be focusing on big and small changes. Larger ones include items like a whole chapter needing to be reworked or you may find you need a whole new chapter! Smaller ones can be word choice, phrasing, or a new passage that would improve description or worldbuilding. Any and all questions you have about your own work or new ideas you want to incorporate should be noted down.

Leave no stone unturned. Don’t be afraid to kill your darlings. If it doesn’t work, even if you love it, get rid of it.

Step Two: The Revision Phase

Once you’ve read through your draft and made all the notes you want to make, you should have a good indication of how much work is ahead of you. Now onto revising. There are many revision methods that authors take to complete their next drafts. I’m going to go over a few options.

1. Chronologically: This is the method that I used. I worked through my changes one chapter at a time, starting from the prologue and ending with the last chapter. Any changes that crossed multiple chapters, I made notes of and made sure to incorporate elements when I got there. I felt like I could see myself progressing much more clearly, and it made me feel closer to the end with each step.

2. Major vs. Minor: Many authors like to focus on making their largest changes first. Plot holes, weak characterization: issues like that are confronted first. These tend to span multiple chapters or even the entire novel. Once major changes are made, then writers confront the smaller issues. These changes usually include items on a chapter by chapter basis.

3. Rewriting: This method is the most time consuming, in my opinion, but some authors find this to be very useful. This method of revision is a conscious choice to start over from the beginning. This is an entire rewrite of your novel. Yes, I know it sounds crazy. But some people do find it easier to incorporate their changes through the natural writing process rather than inserting changes in here and there. Hey, once you’ve done it once, the next one is easier!

Once you’ve finished making all of your changes, big and small, you’ve got yourself a second draft! Isn’t that exciting?!

House of War

Inspiration for the House of War

The House of the War is a unique self-sufficient community. They have enough resources to nearly fully sustain themselves without assistance from any of the other Houses. They keep to themselves mostly because they can afford to. They have the largest army out of all of the Houses and keep their people well trained, ready to move on a moment’s notice. There aren’t many weak links in their system.

Flag: A dark gray flag with a red border and a stone hammer crossed with an iron sword in the center

Lay of the Land: A valley/river kingdom: one city, two large towns, six villages.

Potency of Magic: 7/10

Main Exports: Iron/iron ore, nuts

Royal Family: High Lord Brandon Electus Caddell, High Lady Cahira Helen Caddell (Kelley), Lord Duncan Malin Caddell, Lord Gideon Lewis Caddell, Lord Lachlan Marshall Caddell

Political Alliance: Alliance of the Lily, intermittently

House of Peace

The House of Peace is a serene utopia filled to the brim with the best intellectuals and artists that the Twelve Houses has to offer. Its main creed is to protect nature, knowledge, and innocence throughout the Three Realms as best they can. The river flows through the center of the lorddom similar to the canals in Venice. Heavy Greek influences throughout.

Flag: A white flag with a blue border and a dove with an olive branch in the center.

Lay of the Land: A river lorddom: one city, one town, five villages.

Potency of Magic: 8/10

Main Exports: Protective charms, clothing, silk, figs, fish

Royal Family: High Lord Gabriel Engel DiAngelo, High Lady Sarah Angela DiAngelo (Davis), Lady Seraphina Cindy DiAngelo, Lady Kiara Lucille DiAngelo, Lady Lara Daniella DiAngelo

Political Alliance: Alliance of the Rose

House of Light

Inspiration for the House of Light

My inspiration for the House of Light came from Disney’s Tangled and the kingdom of Corona. I enjoy the brightness and animated atmosphere and wanted to translate that into this House. Due to an abundance of fertile farmland, this community is mainly based in farming villages with one large market town as pictured above.

Flag: A pale yellow flag with a red border and a sunburst outline in the center.

Lay of the Land: A valley lorddom: one town, four villages

Potency of Magic: 6/10

Main Exports: Animals, animal products (eggs, milk, beef, etc), sugarcane

Royal Family: High Lord Aaron William Blake, High Lady Maria Deliana Blake (Swanson), Lady Alena Dawn Blake, Lady Aurora Meira Blake

Political Alliance: Alliance of the Rose

House of Fire

The House of Fire feels like what you would imagine a medieval kingdom that’s heavily reliant on masonry and blacksmithing. The architecture is heavily reliant on stonework; the palace is constructed entirely from stone. The towns contain open air markets where multiple forgers line the covered areas. The streets are fairly crowded between the hordes of people and black horses pulling items up and down the streets. The House of Fire also boasts a very well trained full-time army, ready for a fight whenever one might begin.

Flag: A red flag with a black border and red-orange flames in the center.

Lay of the Land: A valley lorddom: two towns, six villages.

Potency of Magic: 6/10

Main Exports: Iron/iron ore, coal, oil, citrus fruit

Royal Family: High Lord Thomas Orion Halden, High Lady Samantha Louise Halden (Boron), Lord Kay Rory Halden, Lord Hayden Alexander Halden, Lady Ariel Elizabeth Halden

Political Alliance: Alliance of the Lily

House of Darkness

The House of the Darkness is a very curious House. The area is rich in population, magic and incredibly modern, but very weak in resources. They are obsessed with time and moving forward, hence the modernity. The leaders of the House of Darkness recognize the importance that the Middle Realm has placed on technology and manage to blend both technology and magic in a way that no other House has accomplished. They have a technological advantage, but their lack of fertile farmland has caused them to become incredibly dependent on other Houses to feed their staggering populace.

Flag: A black flag with a red border and devil horns in the center.

Lay of the Land: A valley lorddom: one city, two towns, three villages.

Potency of Magic: 7/10

Main Exports: Metal, machinery, watches. Center of Black Market trade.

Royal Family: High Lord Carron Hepti Infernos, High Lady Katherine Anna Infernos (Finite), Lord Faolan Alon Infernos, Lady Cary Elipse

Political Alliance: Alliance of the Lily

House of Earth

The House of Earth reminds me of a series of quaint medieval villages. Although the lorddom is very tiny, it manages to generate most of the food in the Upper Realm. The kingdom is very humble, mostly agriculturally driven. The villages provide for themselves and no more; extravagance is not really a concept in this area. The largest exporter of any of the Twelve Houses.

Flag: A brown flag with a green border and a tiny sapling in the center.

Lay of the Land: A valley lorddom: seven villages, lots of farming country.

Potency of Magic: 4/10

Main Exports: Grain, animal products, vegetables, nuts

Royal Family: High Lord Adam Davis Jameson, High Lady Haley Katherine Jameson (Winson), Lord Demetrius Paul Jameson

Political Alliance: Alliance of the Rose

House of the Moon

The House of the Moon is tiny, but one of the richest kingdoms twofold. One, due to proximity to both a precious stone and a diamond mine, and two, because of its rich supply of magic. Its proximity to the moon creates some of the most powerful magical items, charms, and spells that can be cast during moontime. A very mystical land to unravel.

Flag: A light purple flag with a silver border and a silver full moon in the center with a crescent moon outlined in shadow against it.

Lay of the Land: A mountain lorddom: one town, five villages.

Potency of Magic: 9/10

Main Exports: Magical items/artifacts, amulets, protective charms, clothing, precious stones, diamonds

Royal Family: High Lord Daniel Emrys Marseilles, High Lady Lily Evelyn Marseilles (Finbar), Lady Luna Illumine Marseilles

Political Alliance: Alliance of the Lily

House of Water

Inspiration for the House of Water

The House of Water reminds me of the kingdom from The Little Mermaid, an ocean lorddom with a quaint charm. The main town is filled with little side streets with hand blown glass shops and little local jewelry stores. It’s a very locally invested area; a lot of money gets put back into promoting local trade and artistry. Being situated on the ocean, the House of  Water hosts the largest harbor complete with grand ships of all kinds, both personal and economic.

Flag: A blue flag with a tealy green border and a wave pattern across the entire flag.

Lay of the Land: A coastal lorddom: one town, ten villages.

Potency of Magic: 5/10

Main Exports: Glass, clothing, jewelry, fish.

Royal Family: High Lord Dylan Christian Triton, High Lady Cordelia Marie Triton (Pan), Lord Tristan Eric Triton, Lady Michelle Pride Triton

Political Alliance: Alliance of the Rose

House of the Day

Inspiration for the House of the Day market

The House of the Day is a beautiful valley kingdom with the most quaint fairy tale charm. The villages have traditional thatched roof houses with central wells. The town that Grace travels into on her first journey into the Upper Realm has one of the largest outdoor markets in all of the 12 Houses. The wooden stalls are covered in brightly colored cloth and house a variety of products. Merchants travel from all over the Upper Realm and Middle Realm representation to trade. An abundance of food, colorful clothes, magical items, protective charms, and a small selection of weaponry can be found up and down a large semi circle in the middle of the square.

Flag: A sky blue flag with a yellow border and a white daisy in the center.

Lay of the Land: A valley lorddom: two towns, eight villages.

Potency of Magic: 6/10

Main Exports: Magic amulets, clothing, fruits

Royal Family: High Lord Michael Helios Gerald, High Lady Helen Marie Gerald (Rouge), Lord Jason Barry Gerald, Lady Emily Ann Gerald

Political Alliance: Alliance of the Rose